Sentence Revising, ENGL 302                                Name__________________________________

Go over these sentences individually, writing down revisions underneath the original.  Also note what you think is wrong with the sentence.  When you are finished, go over each sentence in your groups and discuss your revisions. 
 

Social workers decided that Tiffany's welfare would not be safe living with her mother.
 

Upon entering the doctor's office, a skeleton caught my attention.
 

Opening the window to let out a huge bumblebee, the car accidentally swerved into an oncoming car.
 

The Chesapeake and Ohio Canal is a 184-mile waterway constructed in the 1800s.  It was a major source of transportation for goods during the Civil War.
 

For many decades the indigenous body politic of South Africa attempted to negotiate legal enfranchisement without result. 
 

The government's "filth" guidelines will gross you out. 
 

When Aunt Harriet put the cake on the table, it collapsed.
 

James told James that he had won the lottery.
 

More and more often, especially in large cities, we are finding ourselves victims of serious crimes.  We learn to accept this with minor complaints. 
 

They shut down all government agencies for more than a month until the budget crisis was resolved.