Read the draft completely, then reread and answer the following questions.
1) What performance is the author writing about? Is all of the required information given (titles, performers, etc?)
2) What is the author saying about the performance on an intellectial and emotional level? That is, what is the thesis of the essay? (The thesis may be implied rather than stated. If it is implied, you shoud be able to state it in a sentence or two.)
3) What recording is the author writing about? Is all of the necessary information given (titles, performers, etc)?
4) What is the author saying about the recording on an intellectial and emotional level? That is, what is the thesis of the essay? (The thesis may be implied rather than stated. If it is implied, you shoud be able to state it in a sentence or two.)
5) What advice can you give the author for revising the draft?